In Grey mouth there was a tall lady called Helga Reissman. She had short straight hair which was the colour of a two dollar coin. Her eyes are like the sky with grey clouds blending in.
Her top is like a fox has jumped on with ink. Her boots look like carvings that the Maori have made just for her. Her favourite colour is black and chocolate brown .And she has a crazy dog called Millie who looks like Hairy maclary. Helga works at Grey Main which is an ordinary but cool school.
Hi Billie Jean, I like your original ideas in this description. You are experimenting with using different language features and vocabulary. I especially like how you have described Miss Reissmann's eyes. Next time it would be great to see you try using a variety of sentence lengths to make your writing even more interesting to the reader. Well done!
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